A professional blog for John Marquis Osborne, a filmmaker working in New York City
Needs more Asian Guy on White girl action (jk)but seriously, it's pretty good. I would suggest you establish more concrete transitions between cuts, though you accomplish that in your ballet segment (Note that I, too, share your ballet fetish) Just don't do wipe transitions. . . only George Lucas is allowed to do that. That's my two cents. Just a photographer pretending to be a reel critic.
nice job. dig the masquerade/ballet thing. and the tire splashing shot. and the rat. and the kiss ending.criticism:1. the pool shot toward the beginning is too long and slow... loses interest...2. fade music more gradually (or is that just my speakers crapping out?)3. needs more hot multi-racial action4. brief nudity wouldn't hurt either...way to be productive and shiz! keep it up! but after more than four hours, consult your doctor...
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